Women Politicians in the State of Missouri
This a rewriting assignment. My first draft was not very good so in the comments I am going to provide the feedback my teacher has given me to help explain where I was lacking information and what she is looking for. Research should start from 1821 when Missouri became a state. I need to have a more engaging thesis statement. First thesis statement was fairly development and contained development information it wasn’t engaging. My body paragraphs lacked logic and reasoning. She felt like it was missing some critical claims. Felt like paragraphs were not very meaningful to the topic. When it came to support and development she felt like most paragraphs didn’t have a clear topic sentence. There was details and examples within each paragraph but was never fully explained for supported. Little to no spelling areas and the paper should flow together nicely. THE FILE THAT I HAVE ADDED WAS MY FIRST DRAFT ( my teacher pretty much hated it so I completely changed the topic) just wanted to provide my first draft
